General Improvements ~
(1) Make sure the paper is adhering to APA formatting rules throughout; format all information, even if it does not flow well; for instance, cite paraphrases in introductory paragraph.
(2) My paper has too high of a similarity percentage due to too many direct quotations. I need to limit them, and paraphrase more -- but make sure to cite it the same.
(3) Make sure to include transitions between paragraphs to help the argument flow better and add to the persuasive factor.
(4) Each piece of evidence should correspond to an appropriate explanation; this will better the organization of my paper and make my arguments easier to understand.
Basic Action Plan:
As stated in my paper, I plan to utilize both advocacy and direct service in bettering the lives of homeless youth. My direct service will consist of helping serve at Third Sunday Meals, and listening to the problems the youth are facing, in addition to possibly tutoring homeless youth via the School on Wheels program. My indirect action will be as a part of the homelessness advocacy team at my church, of which I am a member.
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